Flash Fiction – The Musician

Image courtesy of Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

 

Beautiful women with Hollywood smiles thrust autograph books towards him but it’s me he wants. Mum said I was too fat. Too ugly. That nobody would ever love me but she was wrong.

He does. Tenderly he urged me to board without him, to ‘protect’ me from the throngs of fans.

‘Anything to declare?’ I am asked as I shift his guitar case from one hand to another.

Barking.

Snapping.

Dogs scratching at the case.

‘You’d better come with me, Miss.”

‘It’s not mine.’ I protest but as he walks past me without a second glance I realise, neither is he.

 

It’s been a busy few weeks. My fourth psychological thriller, The Date, was published a few days ago and has already hit the UK top 40 and the US top 20. Thanks to all who supported. Publication day was spent in London where I was fundraising for Parkinson’s Disease, a charity close to my heart.

The Date is centred around Prosopagnosia/Face Blindness & for my YouTube channel I interviewed Hannah Read who has the most severe reported case in the UK to ask her what it’s really like when everyone looks like a stranger. You can watch that here and find The Date on Amazon here

Friday Fictioneers is a weekly 100 word photo challenge inspired by a photo prompt. Hop on over to host Rochelle’s blog to read the other entries or join in!

71 thoughts on “Flash Fiction – The Musician

  1. Ah, bless her – she’s been taken for a ride and now has to pay for it. I love how you set up your character in the opening, Louise, show us how vulnerable she was to a bit of smarm and a little kindness. Great story.
    And very many congratulations on the new release – you’re amazing!

  2. Oh no, another naive hopeful being swayed by the fleeting glance of a handsome musician. This is exactly why the announcements at the airport tell you not to carry anything for strangers! But youth is so eager to please…

  3. Such a full tale, the back story of their relationship hinted at, his true nature revealed as he walks on by. The single word lines are really effective at slowing the action down and helping to paint the scene.

  4. You built the story well with a great twist. Poor girl. You hear of this kind of thing happening and I always wonder “How?” But, some snakes are crafty. Congratulations on the publication of your book!

  5. There’s a reason the airports announce that you should not let anyone touch your luggage or accept bags from anyone else. Of course, they say nothing about supposed boyfriends.

    Congrats on your best seller status!

  6. Congratulations on publishing. I was going to give you some writing tips, but it seems like you don’t need them.

    I haven’t figured out the key to success in the publishing industry, sometimes I think it’s just who you know, a little bit of good timing and a lot of luck. My teacher taught me about Kairos, but I haven’t been able to fully adopt it. Writing comes naturally to me, but I emulate classical authors more than writing what is new. Like, my new stuff is like Longfellow, though I hadn’t read a lick of him until yesterday. And if my luck would have it, he’s not well received by critics anymore. I suppose that’s the story of my life, right? Professional, with nobody to read it.

      • Thanks. I’m a hard worker. I have 14 books I’ve written. I can go back and reread my stories after a few years, so I assume they’re alright.

        The only thing I would have done differently was state that the narrator was at an airport or train station within the first two sentences. Maybe a three word image. Other than that, it was excellent. 🙂

      • Also, the ambiguity of the “Dogs scratching at the case” was a good literary device. Could it be airport security dogs, or could it be the crowd? I think it does well for a metaphor, but a setting is like a thesis statement in writing an essay. It helps orient the reader within the world. I didn’t come to that conclusion myself. A professor at my community college had to tell me, but it’s really helped me write.

Thanks so much for reading!

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