It’s the thought…#FlashFiction

Image courtesy of Sandra Crook

 

‘What is it?’ Disappointment drips through every word and my heart cracks a little more. I’ve got it wrong. Again.

She reaches for her phone to plaster my failure over Facebook no doubt.

‘It’s a symbol of love.’ I take her hand in mine. ‘The circle represents something that has no end. The gold emblem because you’re precious and the point is…’ My eyes sweep the room, settling on the book of Everest in the bookcase. ‘A promise there’s no mountain we can’t overcome,’ I kiss her palm. ‘Together.’

‘Oh I LOVE it.’ Her fingertips slip into the waistband of my jeans while I desperately hope she never finds the packaging for the revolutionary new cleaning appliance designed to make her life easier.

It’s the thought that counts.

 

For those of you who missed it on my blog last week I was chatting to Harper Collins author Darren O’Sullivan about positivity, gratitude and whether you really can visualise your way onto the bestsellers list. I believe so. You can catch up with that here

I make no apologies for going a tad over the word count this week because it’s Christmas! ‘It’s the thought’ was written for Friday Fictioneers. A weekly 100 word story challenge inspired by a photo prompt hosted by the fabulous Rochelle. Wishing everyone a very happy festive season and huge thanks to Rochelle for all her hard work this year keeping us going!

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59 thoughts on “It’s the thought…#FlashFiction

  1. Hahaha. It’s indeed the thought that counts though I am certain there’d be a ping-pong of words when she finds out what it really is. Poor guy, he tried, his best, perhaps.
    Great story, Louise.

  2. Married to an supremely practical man, I’ve learned to accept the revolutionary cleaning devices for what they are–his way of loving. I hope the girl in this story catches on soon.

  3. Dear Louise,

    Nothing says “I care,” like a food processor. 😉 As for blasting it all over Facebook…hm…one of my pet peeves indeed. I like FB for networking but not for hanging dirty laundry.
    As one who obsesses over word count, I dare you to edit out the extra words. 😉 Good one

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  4. Love his groping round the room, searching for an extra meaning to his gift! She does sound like a lady who’s hard to please. And plastering his failures over social media? What a baggage! Great tale Louise

  5. Presents can be so difficult to choose, can’t they? Your humorous tale is a warning to all male readers that very, very few women would prefer a domestic appliance to a nice piece of jewellery, beautifully wrapped and presented in a suitably romantic fashion!

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