Image courtesy of Liz Young.
‘I’m dying.’ Panic builds.
‘Shh. You’re not. I won’t let you.’ He tightens his grip on my hand and I remember the first time he laced his fingers through mine. We had picnicked under the sunflower sun, the smell of cut grass drifting through the breeze. Now it’s the stench of hospitals that sticks in my throat. Dettol and decay.
‘I want to die.’ I can’t bear the pain anymore.
‘You said that last time you gave birth but it was worth it afterwards when you held our baby, remember? Midwife says not long now. Relax.’
‘Relax?’ Bastard. I hate you.’
I missed last week’s Friday Fictioneers. I was trying to juggle the school holidays with finishing the first draft of book 3, but the end is in sight! I also took part in a local library incentive which made me cry, which you can read about here.
I’ve tried to keep this week’s story lighthearted. I’m sure from the prompt there will be many entries bringing a lump to the throat. ‘Unbearable’ was written for Friday Fictioneers. A weekly 100 word story challenge, hosted by Rochelle, inspired by a photo prompt.

The scents work really well, Louise
Thanks Neil.
I had no idea she was giving birth till the end. Well done!
That was the idea! Thank so much for reading 😀
Thought this was going to be a tragedy, but in the end we have smiles and a wonderful event to look forward to. Thanks for that, Louise – made me smile. Well done for finishing Book 3 – and for surviving the Easter hols in one piece! 🙂
I think there will be much sorrow in this week’s stories.
Very true – thanks for bringing a smile
Oh! What a treat this is. I love the switch from death to impending life.
Thanks Alicia. I felt like a happy end.
Lovely twist at the end.
Thanks!
Love the surprise effect… here you led me to believe that she was dying…
Good! Thanks 😃
This was more than beautiful. Given the other writes, I feared it might end in her death, and maybe it does… but that is for another day. Today, I’m envisioning her holding the little one to her breast and forgetting all about dying.
Thank you! No death here. Her labour just felt like it to her!
Doesn’t it always. I remember labor with no epi in the middle of “hell” as I call it. You captured the emotion well.
Ouch!
This is great! I thought she was dying in a field at first. Then the little cues of love came in.
Thanks for reading 😃
How do I partake in Friday Fictioneers?
Click on the name Rochelle in my bit under my story. That will take you to her blog where there are full instructions. Good luck!
Great story! I initially thought she was dying in a field until the end. I liked how you weaved in love and it came together in the end.
Thanks 😃
Dear Louise,
I love where you took this. Those of us who have given birth know the truth of this. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks! It’s never forgotten I think.
it’s forgotten enough to do it again! 😉
Yep. Three time for me!
Great misdirect,
Thanks Michael!
Well I remember the look of hatred during childbirth. It lasted long after, so we are no longer married.
Oh that’s a shame.
No good marriage ends in divorce, and fourteen years later I am wonderfully married to a marvelous woman. The hate look during childbirth was part of a series of ignored warnings, it turns out. 🙂
Alls well then 😃
This was a great take on the prompt, Louise! You had us all going there…
Thanks. Yes unlike me to have a happy ending!
Enterprising to bring life to a prompt that signifies the end of it. Well done. A welcome relief.
Thanks. I did hope so.
Phew! Nice turn-around 🙂
All good for a change!
I’m kinda glad the first one I read of this didn’t end in death!
I thought there would be too much of that this week.
Really LIKE your take on the prompt!
One day a friend was telling me about how angry she got during those painful “sessions,” three in all, and her husband added, “yes, she was swearing at me!” rather embarrassing for a pastor!
Haha – if only he could feel it…
Well done! Great piece!
Btw, I did the same. Cursed my husband at the end of my third pregnancy. Guess its chronic!😊
I think so! Thanks for reading.
A happy end! Or rather a happy beginning. I love the way the mood of the story changed in the end.
Thanks for reading.
My pleasure!
you did it again, master storyteller. amazing how you can pull our legs in barely 100-words. 🙂
Aww thank you so much 😊
Wonderful twist! I remember that phase of childbirth – swearing at the OH when he made an inane comment!
Me too!
Haha…brings back memories!
For me too!
Excellent twist, I enjoyed re-reading this with a new perspective.
I’m looking forward to book 3 too 🙂
Thanks so much 😃
A welcome twist to that story that I was convinced was on its way down a dark alley. I’ve often heard women say “never again” after going through the pain of childbirth, so I feel very blessed at having had two easy and quick labours!
Oh you are lucky Sarah!
Wow! When I started reading, I thought that she was really dying! Great twist. Loved it
That’s so good to hear 😃