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The back door creaked open. I shouldn’t go. But the thought of Jake waiting for me at the park pulled me. I shivered and it wasn’t the middle-of -the-night-chill but the anticipation of Jake’s hands heating me.
I wheeled my bike down the side of the house. Paused as the latch on the gate squeaked open. It wasn’t too late. I could go back to bed but my feet carried me forward. I pedalled as fast as I could. I pedalled so fast my dad’s warning words couldn’t catch me ‘there’s a killer out there.’
I didn’t care.
I was in love.
A super busy week with a deadline looming and the school on their Easter holiday but when I saw the prompt it fitted perfectly with a paragraph I’ve just written for book 3 soI couldn’t resist using this excerpt.
Friday Fictioneers is a weekly 100 word challenge inspired by a photo prompt and hosted by the fabulous Rochelle.
fabricating fiction 
…Good luck with that!
Think she’ll need it!
I hope that turns out to be good enough reason. Looking forward to ‘The Sister’ arriving this week.
Love has a lot to answer for! Do hope you enjoy The Sister.
It’s not going to go well for her is it? As she says, she shouldn’t go. Great tension, Louise
Thanks Neil. I’m not sure what’s going to happen next but it doesn’t look good!
Great teaser for the book. Always listen to dad, just like I tell my kids, who then ignore me.
Haha – they sound like mine!
Parents are always right – even when they’re wrong! Sadly, she might find this out too late. Beautifully written, Louise
Thanks Lynn.
My pleasure 🙂
Love trumps all! Hopefully.
Not in my stories…
Oh, the suspense of it…. great write! Can’t wait to see if she made it to the park or not. 🙂
Me too!
Dear Louise,
Anytime an excerpt fits the prompt I say, “Go for it!” Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle 😃
Great first line. It entices the reader to keep going, and sets the mood.
Thanks Mandie.
You do know how to ratchet up the tension. I’m shouting at the screen, “Noooooo.”
Thanks Tracey. She’s a tad foolish but I’m growing very fond of her.
Oh that was a great set up for a tragic ending. I don’t think you can ever out run you’re parents words, you just choose to ignore them.
Oh! Creepy, that! Too bad Dad didn’t hear all the squeaks! Delightful set-up.
she was in love. i don’t blame her for taking the risk. hopefully, she brought along pepper spray or something to protect her.
Suspenseful… reminds me of episodes in the gift where Jenna was trespassing at Nathan’s!
I felt that I was there, in a good way. Glad not to read the next paragraph as I fear what may occour
There’s always “a killer out there” but we just do take the chances. Anyway, when you’re young, you’re indestructible, right? Your protagonist is not going to sit home and let love pass her by. 🙂
Can’t wait to read the full-length version of this! Lovely writing – as always!
You might be soon! 😃
Silly girl. I hope she can cycle fast. You just know something bad is going to happen, or she’s going to witness something bad.
I just knew this was an excerpt from your next novel, as I was reading it.
PS I’m ashamed not to have read your first two novels yet, but Sister is getting near to the top of my reading list, so please bear with me.
I’m grateful it’s in your pile at all 😃
The crazy things we do for love!
And yet we still do them…
What a wonderful teaser!
Thanks Dawn. Having fun with this one 😃
Aaaah, the suspense! Great teaser. Somehow I’m not so sure about Frank.
Thanks for reading.
I was so fearless when I was younger, these days not so much. Nice!
Me too!
Looking forward to reading the rest
😃
The things people would do in the name of love!
Indeed!