Image © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
‘You,’ the roadie says, his breath hot and sour. Other fans glare as I’m led backstage. Smoke and sweat string my throat. OMG! There he is! Jack! He pulls me onto his lap and I’ve never been so happy.
***
He’s bought me a new phone! Mum kept ringing. Begging.
‘A Levels are for kids,’ Jack says as he tightens the strap around my arm. Euphoria floods my veins. I’ve never been so happy.
***
The doctor snaps on gloves. My feet are in stirrups. ‘A simple procedure’ Jack says, handing me a bracelet. Diamonds! Me! I don’t know why I’m crying. I’ve never been so happy.
Unlike my poor main character I am so happy today that The Sister is currently no. 9 in Psychological Thrillers on Amazon . Big thanks to everyone that has preordered and all the book bloggers who have reviewed. The ebook still available for an introductory price of £0.99 prior to it’s July 7th release, when it will also be available as a paperback and audio book.
‘He Rocks’ was written for Friday Fictioneers. A 100 word story inspired by a photo prompt. Hop over to host Rochelle’s blog and read the other entries here.
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I think you’ve done a really fantastic job of telling a fairly comprehensive story in so few words! I think the repetition works, and the euphoria flooding her veins was a well placed metaphor.
Thanks very much. I’m so glad it made sense – it was a lot to cram in!
Powerful stuff this is, and rather topical
Thanks Michael.
Fab little vinaigrettes that add the seasoning to an even better story 🙂
Thanks Helen.
I agree. A lot happened in only a hundred words and it was very effective
Thanks very much.
A concisely written, well structured tragedy. Love the weeping and self deluded cries of happiness – sad but clever. And congrats on your success with The Sister – a great achievement and well done 🙂
Thanks very much Lynn – on both counts.
My pleasure 🙂
Such a sad tale. Nicely done.
Thanks Clare.
This is a story played out over and over… yet I feel it like a fist in my stomach. Somehow a very early video of Marian Faithful singing “as tears goes by” popped up in my mind.
Thanks Bjorn. Some things never change.
So much to say about this, so vivid in each scene. So well written it makes you feel more and more for her with each section.
Thanks Mick 😃
So well done. I agree, the repetition works so well here.
Oh goody! Another FF’s book to read!
Thanks Dale!
Very nicely told
Thanks for reading Dahlia.
A very chilling piece. You packed so much in, but not so much that it felt cluttered. I can feel the girl’s internal struggle – is this a good thing or not?
Great piece!
Thanks very much.
Wow, Louise! You packed punch on that one. The ironies abound throughout. It’s almost like the rock star did what he did because he could. This sounded like the story (almost) of the former girlfriend of Aerosmith’s Steven Tyler who got her pregnant, but she kept the baby who, I think, might have been Olivia. Anyway, good story!
Interesting and good for her. This rock star is way too used to getting his own way.
I agree and you delivered on it.
Interesting contrasts between experiences that cause euphoria. I enjoyed it.
Thanks so much for reading.
Thank you for writing!
i like the way you wrote this story. it was surreal. simply amazing what you can do in 100 words.
Thank you!
Amazing story, and it rings so true. You really made every word count here.
Thanks!
found it intriguing
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Thanks for reading 🙂
I found your story to be very disturbing and chilling, especially that last bit. Poor girl!
The contrast between the three sections stopped me in my tracks.
Euphoria flooding her veins is a great image and metaphor.
Thanks very much – it is a sad tale but part of me wants to shaker her and send her home to mum!
Haha! Indeed! You’re welcome.
Poor little lost girl – so many fans took that route. Well written.
Thanks Liz.
Wow, what a story, Louise. I can feel the intense emotion behind each scene, even when so brief. Great piece!
Sad story and what has probably happened too many times. Congratulations on the success of your new book. 🙂
Thanks very much Deborah 😃
Brilliant.
Thanks 😃
So sad. I wonder if we’re doing any better these days at building up the self-confidence of little girls so they’re not such easy prey to types like Jack. What a world. You’ve captured it so convincingly, Louise. And congratulations on your book’s success.
I think Margaret with the media pressure to look like celebrities we’re probably not, sadly. Thanks for reading.
This one is just brilliant, Louise. Each stanza had me and held me, as my heart sank. So good! And GIANT mazel on your book!! Congratulations!
Thanks so much Dawn.
Pre-ordered the book; can’t wait!
This left me feeling a bit down, but I suppose that was the intent. Good job.