Photo courtesy of Marie Gail Stratford
The hotel bar thrummed with the pop of champagne and the chink of glasses. I slid onto an empty stool. The man next to me rolled the sleeves up on his shirt, his arms were tanned and although I noticed the faint white strip where his wedding ring should be, I didn’t mention it when he introduced himself.
‘Jack.’
A frisson of excitement ran through me.
‘Lucy.’
Our eyes locked. Electricity crackled.
Soon we were in the lift, pulling at clothes, panting hard.
My phone rang. The babysitter.
‘Sorry.’ I said. ‘Maybe next year?’
‘Happy anniversary’ he muttered, slipping his ring back on. ‘Let’s go home.’
Written for Friday Fictioneers. A 100 word story inspired by a photo prompt. Hop over to host Rochelle’s blog and read the other entries here.
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Good story. Thanks for adding the word, Frisson, to my vocabulary
Glad you enjoyed 🙂
Lovely idea, well told Louise, glad you wrote it
With some people posting two I had to give it a go 😉
I think somethings are sacred and FF is one. You should always do it 😊
Clever story. 🙂
Thanks very much.
Nothing like a little role play to keep the spark alive… dang kids ruining the fun…
That was the plan! Thanks Dale.
Thought that I knew where this was going, but not. Loved the twist.
Thanks very much Mike.
It was perfectly innocent after all lol 🙂 well done.
It was! Thanks for reading.
I loved the twist ending. Very well done!!
Thank you Jan.
Nicely done and a great ending!
Thanks Jim.
Role play – great idea. Need to turn the phone off though.
Oh boo, don’t you just hate it when that happens? 🙂 Great story!
Thanks!
Dear Louise,
That ending nearly made me spew coffee through my nose. Delightful story.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Now there’s an image! Thanks.
Hahahahahaha!!!! Now THAT’S a great story, Louise! I like those words, too — “thrummed.” Awesome! The ending makes me wonder how many that babysitter is watching, you know?
This story gets five out of five floors. 😀
Thanks so much. Five out of five floors is high praise indeed 🙂
You ended it beautifully. 🙂
Thanks very much.
Nicely twisted there. Good idea.
Thank you.
Five corks! Loved it!
Thanks very much.
You got me all excited there! 🙂
Lily
That made me chuckle, great little piece 🙂
Thanks Helen.
Haha–I like that they’re trying to spice things up–I wish them luck!
Thanks Emily!
ha ha . Great twist at the end there. Well done.
Thanks very much.
I got it the moment you mentioned a call from babysitter. Ha ha nice take.
Thanks for reading.
Doh! Oh, almost. I can certainly appreciate their effort. I liked the twist!
Thanks Amy.
a feel good story. i truly enjoyed it.
Makes a change for me! Thanks 🙂
A good story. You left me with a smile.
Thanks Dawn.
Crackling passion and a sweet ending, you had me there for a moment. I love it.
Much appreciated.
Nice twist ending! It’s nice to relive those early carefree days, at least until an interruption comes
It is! Thanks for reading.
Nice use of “frisson.” Great story! Love it when couples can be creative in their relationship.
Thank you!
I was like nooo at the beginning, but yeeees at the end. I love happy stories! Yours is marvelous. 😀
Thanks 🙂