‘Is there someone else?’
You study your hands, twisting the thin gold band on your ring finger round and round.
‘Ruth?’
You wipe your palms on your lap and shake your head.
You’re lying.
Last night I had crouched in the dirt like an animal peering through his window. I watched as he unzipped your dress, sliding it from your shoulders.
‘I’m sorry,’ you say and you stand, smoothing down your skirt as you turn to walk away.
Do you really think I will let you go that easily my love?
I loop piano wire around your pale neck.
Till death do us part.
Written for Friday Fictioneers. A 100 word story inspired by a photo prompt. Read the other entries here.
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Wow! That was really good! I definitely didn’t expect the dark turn it took at the end 😀
Thanks Tori.
I really like the last line, it shows the finality without being over dramatic and I fill like somehow it fits the personality of the husband and the way he had been talking so far.
Thanks. I couldn’t really add any details within the confines of the word count. Some things are best left to the imagination …..
Marriage Guidance out of the question…lol.
I don’t think one of them would say much if they went …..
That was marvelous! Didn’t see it coming, but when it did I heard a neck snap.
Thanks Karen.
No discussion – the end.
It’s pretty final!
Well I did not expect that! Great ending, very well done!
Thanks Rachel.
yuck.
What a waste of piano wire.
randy
You haven’t heard me play!
Jealousy: a most selfish emotion. Good piece.
Thanks very much.
A kill and the best part of the vow “Till death do us part.” Great twist!
Thank you Norma.
Great storytelling, loved the ending!
Thanks very much Cheryl.
Yeeks, I wasn’t expecting that to turn so dark. Great story!
Thanks Ali.
Yikkes! I didn’t see that one coming…neither did She I guess
Not sure I did either!
Nice descriptive details – the hands, the ring, the skirt – you really show her nervousness and guilt, and then the sudden finish packs such a big punch after all the buildup of tension.
Thanks for your feedback Margaret. I appreciate it.
Justifiable homicide?
Crime of passion?
Temporary insanity.
I’m working on the defense case….;)
Premeditated so I’m not sure how he will get out of that one!
I love the dark twist at the end. Great story. 🙂
Thank you!
it’s very clever of you not to enclose your dialogues within quotation marks. it has added more punch to them.
Thanks.
Louise, the play of dialogue with inner voice is tight and sharp here. It really pulls the reader in and creates perfect tension. The chilling end just nails that process. Really well done!
Thanks so much.
Oh dear. That didn’t go as planned, did it? Cheating never pays and sadly it can be deadly…
Well done!
Not as she planned anyway!
Indeed – death can be a solution.. But I guess he would still be alone.
Yes and he couldn’t even play his piano!
The tension was palpable through her actions. Excellent evocation.
Thanks Tracey.
I agree with Dawn; the dialogue interplay of her spoken words with his inner thoughts is brilliant. The sudden, violent ending is very well done. Too bad the guy took his vows quite literally!
He’s an all or nothing guy. Thanks Jan.
Dear Louise,
A most excellent somebody done somebody wrong song. The piano wire was a nice touch.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle.
Very nicely crafted piece here Louise you fitted a lot into a very tight space, well done. 🙂
Thanks very much.
Lovely deatil, Louise, and a completely unexpected ending. Piano wire has suddenly taken on a completely new meaning! Well written! 🙂
Thanks so much Millie.
I loved the way you showed her nervousness trough his eyes and inner dialogue. And the end… eek, I didn’t see it coming, it was perfect(ly cruel).
Thanks very much.
Dear Louise,
Ooooh, that was wicked good. I love the lead up and then the final note. Lovely work.
Aloha,
Doug
Thanks very much Doug. Enjoy your Sunday.
Nice ending! And the piano wire continues the musical theme perfectly
Thanks very much.
Good story…with a surprise ending…thank you.
Thanks Shivangi.
Eeek – I felt the piano wire tighten. Very well told
Thanks Siobhan.
Masterfully written, from the heartbreaking beginning to the chilling end. Bravo!
Much appreciated.