Rage pours off my pen and spews onto the page, as I think of last night. The congratulations bestowed upon my little sister. They thought her so pure, so deserving as they toasted her success. I knew better.
Twenty years ago I watched as she buried her stillborn daughter, the result of an unknown teenage pregnancy.
I vowed never to tell, but as I sit in my flea ridden bedsit I think why shouldn’t I share her good fortune? She can afford to buy my silence.
I slip the letter under her door, go home and wait for my ship to come in.
If you want to know the reaction to the letter, read The Secret (Part I).
Written for Friday Fictioneers. A 100 word story inspired by a photo prompt. Read the other entries here.
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I’m just beginning to make the step from poetry into flash fiction. I like the idea of using a photo prompt. I also enjoyed your story 🙂
Thanks Anne. It is a good challenge, steers me in a new direction anyway.
We seldom think of consequences, do we? The rage is dripping from those words, very gripping story and well tied to the first part. I like this idea, of two stories in one week, like a tennis match. Very imaginative take on a prompt.
Thanks. I didn’t intend on doing two but couldn’t stop thinking about the whys.
As we all should.
Oh boy, is she the least attractive of the two sisters or what? Good sequel.
She is quite bitter! Thanks.
Wow, you packed so much emotion into this. Very intriguing!!! Great job 🙂
Thanks Rachel.
Terrific
Thank you John.
Such treachery! Enjoyed this one.
Thanks Karen.
Now we know. What sadness at the wedge between the sister!
janet
And at what the one sister did, of course!
Siblings! Thanks Janet.
Dear Louise,
A perfect bookend to your first story. The ship will sink, the light will go out and all will be left in darkness. Really good storytelling this week.
Aloha,
Doug
Thank you. First time I’ve tried a follow up.
Sibling rivalry at it’s worst. Fabulous story!
Nothing quite like sibling rivalry. Thanks.
Intriguing. I can feel the secret eating away at her over all the years. Not a good thing to keep bottled up.
Secrets never stay hidden forever do they? Thanks.
A little treasure hunt for clues. 🙂
Thanks Tracey.
I wasn’t expecting it to be a sibling! I wonder how they’ll feel once the events in “Part 1” play out?
Guilty I hope!
Dear Louise,
The aha moment. Very well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle.
Great story, all the more powerful from knowing the outcome. Very clever to post the other one first!
The pair go well together. My sympathies lie totally with the little sister.
Mine too. Thanks Patrick.
Great and gripping story.
Thanks very much Norma.
Just discovered this group?game?challenge? and love the idea… but YOUR idea of the other side of the story, has REALLY inspired me to participate. Let me go find my quill pen and I’ll join in! Thanks for the nudge!
That’s great. I look forward to reading yours.
You made me think of a girl I knew in school they sent away to have her baby her parents made her give up. I was just a kid next to her, but my heart broke. Imagine living with that. Your girl’s baby was stillborn, but loss is loss. Very thoughtful piece.
That’s so sad Susannah. Thanks for commenting.
Oh, such bitterness! It’s been brewing for twenty years. I love how you’ve built the feelings of this older sister, and her final decision at the end is a masterful stroke.
Can’t beast a bit of sibling rivalry.
Oh, human drama! Hooks me.
Lily
Thanks Lily.
That was a very clever approach to a flash piece! I will have to try my hand at that perspective sometime soon.
I look forward to reading it.
what a nice sister she has. if i were her i’d let her ship sink to the bottom of the ocean.
Me too!
Beautiful writing 🙂
Thanks so much.