Flash Fiction – Coming, ready or not



One, two,

I watch as you process my words. Your eyes widen and jaw slackens. Sweat beads on your brow.

three, four, 

You slowly back away, head shaking from side to side.

five, six,

Your chest heaves, shoulders quake as fear restrict lungs that gasp for pine scented air.

seven, eight,

Your eyes dart wildly around as you desperately try to remember which way the road is. Which way safety lies. Even if you knew, you wouldn’t make it, but it will be fun to watch you try.

You pivot and run through the trees.

nine, ten.

Coming ready or not.


Written for Friday Fictioneers. A 100 word story inspired by a photo prompt. Read the other entries here

48 thoughts on “Flash Fiction – Coming, ready or not

  1. An innocent childhood game, or a wicked sadist taunting his victim? I’m going for door number 2 heh heh!
    Either way, great tension build-up with the numbers 🙂

  2. Ooh, a very scary hide-and-seek. The pursuer/stalker/murderer seeing it as a game makes it so much scarier.

  3. Dear Louise,

    Why did I suddenly have a mental flash of Jack Nicholson in The Shining? Great build of tension. Something tells me this isn’t just a friendly game of Hide and Seek.



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