Flash Fiction – Drifting

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Six months volunteering in a Nepalese orphanage doesn’t fill the void inside me. The wide, bright, smiles of the too thin children, the fierce hugs and the progress we have made does not make me feel whole again.

I spend the summer in the USA, teaching sports to disadvantaged children. I am surrounded by the whoops and hollers of my team mates. My heart aches with loneliness.

In Cambodia, I dedicate myself to Wildlife Conservation. The elephants stride, trunk to tail.

‘Beautiful, aren’t they.’ I turn towards the voice.

Clear amber eyes lock onto mine. My pulse skyrockets. This time, I just might stay.

 

 

Written for Friday Fictioneers. A 100 word story inspired by a photo prompt. Read the other entries here

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64 thoughts on “Flash Fiction – Drifting

  1. Dear Louise,
    I like your take on the prompt this week. Moving from the literal boat to metaphor works well. The hopeful ending plays out nicely with just a hint of mystery to leave your reader engaged and wondering by the final word. Well handled.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

  2. Hopeful and lovely, Louise. The idea of searching the world for something– all the while filling others with hope, and reaching out– to finally feel a connection. Really nice.

    It’s good to see you having a hopeful day, amidst the gray. xo

  3. Elephants are my favorite animals so it doesn’t surprise me that the narrator would choose to stay after working with one! But my guess is those clear amber eyes didn’t belong to an elephant but to someone walking on two feet!

  4. I like your figurative use of the picture. It reminds me of a good friend of mine who has drifted all over the world like this, teaching and volunteering. Maybe she hasn’t found the right person yet either. 🙂

  5. Dear Louise, “Everybody needs somebody sometime!” is just as true now as when Dean Martin sang it. Wonderful, meaningful story and well written! Thank you for the entertainment! Nan 🙂

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