Flash Fiction – SoCS – Where would the world be?

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‘You are good,’ said Father Brian admiring the patchwork of colour Janet had created. Containers of sweet peas, peonies and lavender bought a warmth to the cool, dark church. ‘I wish more people were like you. The world would be a better place.’

‘I do my best,’ blushed Janet.’‘See you tomorrow Father.’

Janet turned into the High Street towards home. The sound of crying sliced through her thoughts. About 40 yards ahead of her was a lone girl of around 6, her face as pink as her torn dress. Long blonde hair hung in matted clumps around her face which was sodden with tears. Blood oozed down her leg from a cut knee, staining her white ankle sock crimson.

Janet pretended to search in her bag for something as she crossed the street. It wouldn’t do to approach a child nowadays. You could be accused of anything. Anyway, she was certain the mother would turn up soon.

Outside the chemist a man hunkered down wrapped in a grimy blanket and sheets of sorrow. His face dark with dirt and loss. A shabby cap was placed in front of him, as he tried to collect loose change and hope from a world that had turned its back long ago. Avoiding eye contact Janet stepped over his dreams of a hot dinner. What was the world coming to begging in the streets? This was England for heavens sake!

At the crossroads the Big Issue seller smiled at Janet. ‘A magazine to help the homeless?’ he proffered. Janet didn’t break her stride, her gaze fixed firmly on a spot in the distance as she bustled ahead.

Turning right into Brown Street Janet was relieved to be home. As she turned her door key she could hear the fumbling of her neighbour unlocking her door.  Stepping over her threshold Janet slammed the door behind her. Old Mrs Davies always wanted a chat. ‘It’s not my problem her husband has died and her children don’t visit’, thought Janet. ‘Besides, my programme starts in 10 minutes.’

The shrill sound of the telephone shattered the silence.

‘Hello,’

‘Hello Janet. I’ve been trying you all afternoon.’

Hello Doris. It was my afternoon for volunteering at the church, doing the flowers for the service tomorrow.’

‘You are such a good person Janet. Always thinking of others.’

‘I know. But where would the world be if we didn’t all do our bit?’

 

 

Written for SoCS. This weeks prompt is ‘end the post with a question and use an exclamation mark somewhere.’ I have not written fiction for this challenge before as was hesitant to stick to the rules of posting without editing.  Kindness is very much on my mind today so the above is my unedited story. (which I guess is the point of Streams of Consciousness)! 

 

‘Where would the world be if we didn’t all do our bit?’

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15 thoughts on “Flash Fiction – SoCS – Where would the world be?

  1. Loved this – enough to reblog a different day (as I have just reblogged someone else!) I think many of us seesaw between generosity and blindness. I know in my case it can be self-preservation as I see so much need it can be hard to stop for all, so I know I often just stop for some…

    • Thanks Michelle. I appreciate the reblog. I love pay it forward stories and random acts of kindness. I think everyone could do something, no matter how small. Glad you have found a balance that works for you 🙂

  2. Excellent story Louise. Good deeds that are all show but have no substance or sacrifice involved are not worth anything. This is a very timely reminder.

  3. Writing fiction stream-of-consciousness style is very challenging; I myself haven’t attempted it for SOCS so I applaud you for doing this. And I loved your story; fictional though it may be, it is absolutely true in regards to how many of us live our lives at times, saying one thing but doing another. Great job and SOCS post!

  4. Great SS!
    I loved the characterisation of the do-gooding church goer who goes to church for selfish reasons and uses it to hide their true personality.
    I’ve known a few of those types and you nailed it.

Constructive criticism appreciated

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