I straighten my tie and pin my button hole with trembling fingers. Abandoning my barely touched breakfast I leave for the church.
The music begins and I turn. I see Leonora start her slow walk down the aisle and momentarily forget to exhale. Effortlessly beautiful in antique lace, she is everything I ever wanted. The world seems to slow, along with my heart. Adoration flows through my veins.
I glance at my brother. It’s unfortunate he is the one marrying the woman I love. I will make sure his death is painless, his widow comforted. We shall be united in grief.
Written for Friday Fictioneers. A 100 word story inspired by the photo prompt.
fabricating fiction 
Dear FF,
Good setup and twist. I wonder if Leonora will agree. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
She should run a mile!
A nice twist near the end there. He’d better plan the murder well, or they are not going to be reunited long!
Thanks.
Terrific set-up and pay-off. Bravissimo!
Thanks for reading.
Couldn’t have said it better myself (minus the Italian) 🙂
Greetings from Greece!
Maria (MM Jaye)
Great twist near the end. I agree that he could very well be caught. He’s apparently thinking only of himself. Well written. 🙂 —Susan
Hope he will be! Thanks Susan.
Always the best man, never the groom…until now! Well done!
Thanks Hannah!
Yikes! Great set-up. “Effortlessly beautiful in antique lace” is a beautiful and memorable line.
(I wonder if this would flow better with a bit of sentence restructuring therefore deleting a few of the “I’s” in the story. Just my 2 cents. Take it or leave it.)
Thanks for the feedback. Yes I didn’t notice that. Have a crazy busy few days ahead and knew if I didn’t do something straight away I would miss this week. I shall play around with it off blog.
Crazy busy does tend to mess with one’s writing. Hope I didn’t offend. I, too, have gobs of trouble overusing I when writing in first person. Glad you didn’t miss this week.
Appreciate the advice. Want to learn as much as I can 🙂
Oh wow! Great twist. I hope she plays ball… or maybe I don’t.
Thanks Sandra.
Such sinister thoughts. Such an awesome twist!
Thanks.
Some really nice writing here. Thanks for posting.
Thanks.
I like how matter of fact the voice of this character is. It makes his intentions all the more believable. Personally, I think I’d ditch the line about him being “the one marrying the woman I love”, because I think it overplays your hand and the twist didn’t need it. Just putting the “united in grief” bit would have made it clear, I think. But I know some people accuse me of being too subtle.
Thanks for the advice – really appreciate it 🙂
Yowza!! I love a story with a twist, and you threw us a couple of sinister ones! Great writing 🙂
Thanks Rachel.
Ah.. he will get caught..and may he rot in prison..
We can but hope!
A man with a plan!
A cunning plan 🙂
Oh, what a wicked twist! Very well done.
Thanks Jan.
Fab! You got me. great twist 😀
Thank you.
Fantastic twisted twist. You totally had me going. I almost stopped reading before the end, it was too blissful for me! Great story.
Haha. Don’t want to be too blissful!
great twist 🙂 almost felt sorry for him and then came the other twist– his plan for murder 🙂
Thanks K.Z.
I’m so pleased it ended like that. I was a bit worried at first.
No happily ever after.
Okay… you got me. Nice and neat.
Thanks 🙂
Great twist, very Game of Thrones.
Thanks. I keep getting told I should watch that. Have the book but not started it yet.
This is like reading an Agatha Christie story. well done
Thanks for reading.
I could hear the crazed violin from “Psycho” at the end. You really got me good, lol! 🙂 -Beth
Haha, yes that would fit!
Love it! Great twist on ‘Brotherly Love’.
Sibling rivalry at its best!
Lovely twist at the end. Very well written story
Thank you.
A bit too good – hope nothing ever happens to Tim writing this sort of stuff!!!!
You never know!
Nice twist – I was just thinking “ooh, this is nice!” when…
Can’t have a happy ending!
Oo…this was cool twist! Loved it! 🙂
Thanks, nothing like a bit of death during a wedding!