The elderly gentleman looked down at the adorable little girl in the dirty white dress tugging on his shirt. “Dance with me mister” she implored. The man laughed as he began to spin her round. The girl’s eyes shone with excitement as her long, dark hair fanned out. The song drew to a close and she ran, barefoot into the night. ‘Sweet young thing’ thought the man.
Hiding in the shadows the young girl stuffed the notes into her knickers before tossing the wallet aside. She skipped out of the alley and tugged the shirt of the nearest man. “Dance with me mister?”
This is my submission to this weeks Friday Fictioneers, a 100 word story inspired by a photo prompt.
You can view all the stories here.
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You sucked me in. Your prose is delightful to read — the scene came immediately alive — I could almost hear music. You might change the word ‘male’ to ‘man’ — seems more natural.
I’m glad you took a unique approach to the story. I’ll be looking forward to your other stories.
Thanks Helena, you’re right so I have changed it to man.
Great Story… Great twist! I really don’t have any suggestions for you, I like it just the way it is : )
Thanks Rachel.
And the morale of the story is beware of girls in white dresses. But seriously, good story. Agree with Helena that man reads more natural than male.
Yep it does thanks, changed it.
Oh yes! I could just see the little minx. Loved it.
Thanks Sandra.
This worked really well – I had a handbag stolen by a very little girl once, so it rings very true
That sucks Siobhan – hope you got it back?
Different take on the picture. I like it. Great job!
Thanks for reading Caerlynn.
I was wondering where my wallet went. Thanks, I’m off to find it. Good story!!
Tee hee.
Cleverly done. Afterwards, I thought I should have seen it coming, but like all great twists, it was a complete surprise. Excellent.
Thanks for reading.
Such an enjoyable story about the nimble fingered pickpocket at work. Wonder if there is Mr Fagin lurking by?
Wonderful job of bait-and-switch as well as pickpocketing. 🙂
janet
Thank you Janet.
I was wondering where it was going and didn’t see the twist coming at all. Great job!
Such an adorable little thief.. Just hope there’s no evil uncle to collect all her money.
Dear FF,
Great job of deceiving the reader, ie me. 😉 Well done and enjoyable.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Brilliant.
This is my favorite so far this week. Perfect little story…. I see a flash forward for the next chapter….
Oh, this is a great story. Good job.
Aha, a sweet little thing. I suspect this isn’t a metaphor for how women treat us men?
No just a ‘things aren’t always what they seem’.
Good story and realistic descriptions to bring it alive.Where there’s a lot of poverty, and that can be anywhere these days, you have to be careful. Here there’s usually an adult in the background. The children see very little of the spoils. One of my uncles used to have a zipper sewn on one of his pants pockets. Here, the buses and trains are the hunting grounds of pickpockets.They sometimes work in pairs.
What a clever take on the prompt!Just loved how the little waif used her ruse to pick pockets!Enjoyed your awesome writing 🙂
The little thief! Jeepers, she’ll be hard to control when she grows up! Good writing! Nan 🙂